I'm sorry to hear about the loss. Best wishes for his family and close friends.
If you would like some constructive criticism, I would say keeping more similar text usually tends to look better. You did this with the colors in the text but the text for the date is a bit too different in my opinion.
I also believe if you had "R.i.p" all capitalized it would look better than just the R, plus it is proper acronym usage to use all caps.
Hope my opinion/view helps.
EDIT: I just realized you may not have been looking for constructive criticism. I misinterpreted the title of your thread, so please, if that was not your intention, do not accept my judgment as an offensive comment.