hemp
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This assignment for English was to find a poem you like and bring it in, I decided to just write my own. Tell me what you guys think and how I can improve it.
Computers come big and small
Some for lan, some for all
faster processor, more speed
more ram, but that's not all you need
dual screen, dual boot
seven proxies, to be like moot
bigger hard drives, more space
just to win the computing race
which motherboard to use
pick the wrong one and you may lose
fanboys rooting on their brand
always thinking that their idea is grand
Anonymous terrorizing you
because that's what they like to do
just when you think you're done
six months later upgrades have just begun
This was written pretty quick so any criticism would be appreciated. Thanks guys.
Computers come big and small
Some for lan, some for all
faster processor, more speed
more ram, but that's not all you need
dual screen, dual boot
seven proxies, to be like moot
bigger hard drives, more space
just to win the computing race
which motherboard to use
pick the wrong one and you may lose
fanboys rooting on their brand
always thinking that their idea is grand
Anonymous terrorizing you
because that's what they like to do
just when you think you're done
six months later upgrades have just begun
This was written pretty quick so any criticism would be appreciated. Thanks guys.